Wednesday, August 31, 2016

How about them plums?

I think the narrator must be very close to the other person in the poem. Considering they not only felt comfortable with eating the other person's food out of their fridge, but also woke up before them to do so, heavy implying they live together. This feeling of familiarity is only strengthened by the poem's brevity and almost complete lack of punctuation and capitalization, which give it the feeling of a note left behind. The way the apology at the end is imminently followed  by a description of the how good the plums taste makes me think the narrator isn't very sincere, but when combined with the feeling of closeness mentioned before makes me think of two siblings stealing each others food. 

And now for my attempt at a poem:


Sailing by Kaitlyn McGuire

I remember
when we were
little and we
would sit
on the beach
and talk
of us
sailing away together

I remember
when we were
teens and we
argued over a
dumb little thing
and as I
fought I thought
of us
sailing away together

I remember
when I was
older and I
sat in the
rain alone
and I dreamed
of us
sailing away together

I remember
when you called
and you said
I could go
sail away
and it hurt
because It was
never about
the boat

1 comment:

  1. Kaitlyn, this is literally one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read. Wow!

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